Women tend to be strong hearted when they are passionate about an important topic in need of help. Anyone would be to try to change a certain issue of concern. Some women’s thoughts about an issue could have similar ideas between, but there will also always be differences in opinions and feelings between everyone. The conversation about women's rights has been going on for a long time. In Lucretia Mott’s lecture called Discourse on Woman and the interview on Gloria Steinem are examples of these similarities and differences on this issue. Both of these women are well-known feminists in their own time era. Mott in her document, which was given in the year of 1849, states powerful ideas and her thoughts on equality. She gave many reasons why men and women should be equal and her beliefs on this issue. More then a century later, in 1995, Cynthia Gorney had an interview with Gloria Steinem. This document showed a brief amount of what Gloria’s thoughts were on topics of women’s issues of that time. There is more in this interview about other topics about Gloria and her life, but with this background on her, it showed some of her personality and ways she went about changing women’s rights. (if you are wondering, my thesis is in the next paragraph because the first one is long)
After reading this first paragraph what do you think my paper is about?
After reading your first paragraph I think that your paper will be about how women's issues and women's rights have changed or stayed the same over time.
ReplyDeleteI can also see that the two documents that will be discussed in your paper will be the lecture by Lucretia Mott called the Discourse on Woman, and the interview on Gloria Steinem.
I feel that you should find a way to include your thesis in the first paragraph because it is crucial to keep the readers' interest. I mention this because it also would then be easier for the reader to see what your paper is going to be about. I can assume your paper is about the womens' rights movement throughout the years however I cannot figure out what exactly you are specifically going to talk about in the paper about the womens' rights movement.
ReplyDeleteAfter I read your first paragraph I think your paper is going to be about how the views of women's right has evolved over the years by comparing the views and opinions of Mott and Gorney.
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