Revising the 1 Report

After posting my first rough draft of the #1 Report, I thought I did well on this paper and was only going to have to do only a few revisions. Well, that was not the case. My preliminary score was to redo it. I was a little disappointed in myself and when I saw this. Only one of my paragraphs referred to the document. My paper only concerns the lecture document in the brief 2nd paragraph. The rest of the piece is about Mott and the women's movement. The paper was 90 percent about Mott and ten percent on the document. It needed to be a report on the document and the ideas you got from the document and then references have to be made to the document throughout the paper. The references to Mott have to be keyed to helping your readers understand the document. I thought it was to be more about what Lucretia Mott did for Women’s issues and her ideas to help this topic. I did not realize that the whole paper had to about a document Lucretia Mott wrote or said and then relate it to ideas she had and to her biography.

To fully understand it and to correctly revise my report, I went back and read the course blog about the assignment and read some of the sample papers to try to get a new idea to begin writing this paper again. I kept my intro and I did not delete everything from my first rough draft. Most of the information I already had I can kept, but I just had to relate it to the lecture. Basically, I needed to refer to the document a lot and throughout my paper. Also, I asked some questions that I could answer by reading her lecture. I did some further research to help connect the ideas from the lecture to her bio and make it easier for the readers of this paper to better understand the lecture Mott made and what kind of women she was.

Overall, I believe that I corrected this paper right and went about revising it with proper ways to make this a better paper. Also, I connected it more to the document throughout. Now I know by making this mistake, I know next time I have to fully understand what we have to do and just doing it correctly, so I will not have to right it over again.