Presentation Feedback

Dear Group members,

Please review my presentation and use the critique sheet Dr. Archibald has provided to give me feedback so that I can improve the presentation.

Conference Notes

I thought my first 5 pages were well thought out and up to the standards for this research paper.  He wants me to narrow it down to one specific industry instead of just talking about all CEOs; I knew he wanted this by reading his comments on my first five pages.  So I went in thinking that I wanted that industry to be healthcare CEOs because I knew there was a woman CEO for Capital Blue Cross since my mom works there, this women CEO resigned and now there is a man CEO.  During my conference with Dr. Archibald, I got many new ideas to add and to change for my research paper.  In my first paragraph he wants me to give specific examples of the rights women have instead of just naming them and connect it to the women’s movement.  It is going to turn out to be a timeline of examples when these rights were claimed and then end with women are still looking for the equality when it comes to business and being economically equal.  Also, he wants me to research specific points for this new topic.  These points are what is holding women back, is the healthcare industry a success for women, and why can’t this happen in other industries.  I need basic fact as well like salary, compensation, promotions to explain where I want to go with this topic. In the end, I will explain with levels I created that will help women have success in this position.  What I plan to do now is do more research on these specific points and rearrange my paper to follow my new topic of healthcare CEOs.         

Sources for the 3ResProj

All of the sources I have found for my research paper will come in great use to argue the main points I want to focus on. The first thing I did for this research process was just searching my main points, which are the salary differences of men and women CEOs and why men are chosen in the workforce over women. Also, I searched reasons why women might be beneficial to a company. For the salary difference point I found many different sites with a lot of different numbers, but I tried to look for at the more up to date pages. It was cool to see though how the salaries of CEOs have changed over time, but not to see that women are still getting paid less. Then I looked up reasons men are chosen more often than men in occupation spots like a CEO. I found many reasons why workers would rather have men over women in a leadership spot. Most of the sites said that women are more emotional, catty, moody, etc. After finding that, I found reasons why women should be in charge to argue that last point I searched about. I did find many facts and professional opinions that showed the women leaders (CEOs) would be more beneficial to their company. I agree with most of the facts that I have found and they do make really good points. All of these sources I have found except for maybe two or three are important to my paper. The ones that I am going to use give a good amount of information that will help my paper have as much as it can to argue my main points. Then, the other ones that I do not really want to use have little information to help my paper. Also, some of them are out of date and for my one document I used for my synthesis paper, there is no information referring to my topic. I feel that I have enough information to get my point across and make this paper a good argument research paper. 

Conference Notes

Going into the conference I thought my proposal was well thought out because I followed the blog where he explained everything. Also, I had good points and ideas to help my argument for my research project. The ideas I got from talking to Dr. Archibald in my conference was to first narrow down my topic again. My topic overall is Women’s Issues and I was originally going to talk about women’s rights with Business, how they are still not equal in that area. In the conference, Dr. Archibald told me to narrow it down to one industry. After we thought about certain occupations I could consider as my new topic, I chose women as CEOs. I got a lot of new ideas to work with, which are salary of CEOs, the position (why can’t women be in charge, why do people think they can’t), and ideas about what women would bring that is different to men in that same position. I plan to do more research about this topic and find some more ideas before I start the paper. Also, I am excited to find out more about the position of being a CEO and argue why women can be in charge for this occupation.

ResProj Paper Ideas

 “Mott gave many reasons why men and women should be equal and her beliefs on this issue. More than a century later, in 1995, Cynthia Gorney conducted an interview with Gloria Steinem. This document showed a brief amount of what Steinem’s thoughts were on topics of women’s issues of that time.”

-For this quote, I could maybe go back in to both documents and see if they stated any thoughts about job statuses between men and women since they said many things about why men and women should be equal in the first place.

“After comparing the two ideas of what these women had to deal with shows how this issue has improved over time with the help of strong feminists, but these women of today’s time are still working for this equality.”

-The issue has improved, but there are still some points that are different between men and women. I can say the ways women still do not have equal rights, so in this case for my paper, the way women are unequal when it comes to business, and then name how they are working for these rights today.

After reading these quotes from my 2Syn paper what do you think about these topic ideas? Do you understand what I am getting at? Which one sounds best to use for the 3ResProj? Why?

Integrating Sources

Example 1

As Mott believes, “ there is nothing greater importance to the well-being of society at large—of man as well as women—than the true and proper position of a women” (Mott 1).  This confession is a clear indication that Mott wants there to be equality between men and women.

Example 2

One statement stuck out when Steinem stated when she asked about her future.  She emphasizes, “if we want a world in which you can tell jokes and get massages and have sex and dress however you fucking well please, then we have to create a form of activism that reflects that, and have fun while we’re doing it”(Steinem 3).  For Mott's era, this is too bold of a statement if Mott would have said this.  The most observant critic would not be fine with hearing a woman of the 19^th century saying this.

Works Cited

Mott, Lucretia. “Discourse on Woman.” Votes for Women: Selections from the National

American Woman Suffrage Association Collection, 1848-1921. American Memory. 17

Dec.1849.<http://memory.loc.gov/cgi-bin/query/r?ammem/nawbib:@field(NUMBER+@band(rbnawsa+n2748)):>.

Gorney, Cynthia. "Gloria." Mother Jones. N.p., Nov/Dec. 1995. Web.  

               <http://motherjones.com/politics/1995/11/gloria>.

First Paragraph of My 2Syn Paper

Women tend to be strong hearted when they are passionate about an important topic in need of help.  Anyone would be to try to change a certain issue of concern.  Some women’s thoughts about an issue could have similar ideas between, but there will also always be differences in opinions and feelings between everyone.  The conversation about women's rights has been going on for a long time.  In Lucretia Mott’s lecture called Discourse on Woman and the interview on Gloria Steinem are examples of these similarities and differences on this issue.  Both of these women are well-known feminists in their own time era.  Mott in her document, which was given in the year of 1849, states powerful ideas and her thoughts on equality.  She gave many reasons why men and women should be equal and her beliefs on this issue.  More then a century later, in 1995, Cynthia Gorney had an interview with Gloria Steinem.  This document showed a brief amount of what Gloria’s thoughts were on topics of women’s issues of that time.  There is more in this interview about other topics about Gloria and her life, but with this background on her, it showed some of her personality and ways she went about changing women’s rights.  (if you are wondering, my thesis is in the next paragraph because the first one is long)

After reading this first paragraph what do you think my paper is about?